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1Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Kuro's Starter Armaments Mon Jan 06, 2014 4:22 am

Kurogane Shizuki

Kurogane Shizuki
Name: Sakabatou [Reverse-Edged Sword]
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: One Thousand Armaments; Elucidator is equipped
Class: Offensive
Element: Non-elemental
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Duration: 1 Post
Effect: This spell turns Elucidator into the Sakabatou, a katana with the exact same specifications as Kuro’s normal weapon. The only differences are that the blade is slightly curved, and the sharp and blunt edges have been swapped. When striking, it will deal bruising D-rank damage, but it has a twist. The moment Elucidator shifts into this form, its speed increases by 25%. This sudden change in speed could cause disorientation for the opponent, and would lower his chance to block the incoming attack by 25%. The katana came from a wandering program in the Atelier, claiming to have been a former virus slayer who swore never to take another life again. Hence, the blunt-edged sword that he used to wield.


Name: Shinobu’s Frying Pan
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: One Thousand Armaments; Elucidator is equipped
Class: Offensive
Element: Non-elemental
Cooldown: 1 Post
Duration: 1 Post
Effect: Back in the Atelier, a young blue-haired girl had the funny idea of using a frying pan as her main weapon. Most of the Knights laughed about it, but one day they saw her standing atop a pile of vanquished viruses, cooking utensil gleaming in the virtual sunlight. Since then frying pans have been standard issue in all knights. This spell retains the handle length of the Elucidator, but reduces the blade into a rounded pan with a 12” diameter. The sudden shift in form could confuse the opponent, and Kuro could take this chance to smack him a good one for D-rank damage plus humiliation that he got hit with a frying pan.


Name: Bunny Bunny Pogo Stick
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: One Thousand Armaments; Elucidator is equipped
Class: Supplementary
Element: Non-Elemental
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Duration: 1 Post
Effect: The Mother Server assigned to Kuro, named Calypso, one day gave him a reward for his never-ending dedication to his duties. Surprise when the reward turned out to be a white pogo stick littered with bunny stickers. Calypso claimed to have seen the item in a show about three bug-eyed girls with deformed bodies. The pogo stick turned out to be useful in the end, as Kuro could use it to get closer to his enemies or launch himself up to set for a stronger strike. When used, he could propel himself 5 meters in any direction, or jump up to 5 meters in the air.


Name: Intendo Hammer
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20 MP
Requirements: One Thousand Armaments; Elucidator is equipped
Class: Offensive
Element: Non-Elemental
Cooldown: 2 Posts
Duration: 1 Post
Effect: Kuro enjoyed games made by Intendo, so much that he was scolded by Calypso once for catching him playing Super Mash Bros. But in that one game he discovered that red, rubber mallets could do so much damage with so little effort. And so he fashioned himself a weapon after that. This spell turns the Elucidator into a giant red toy hammer, its handle length the same as the full length of Kuro’s original weapon (42”), and the hammer 2 feet long and 1 foot in diameter. The hammer whacks for a good C-rank damage that can stun an opponent for 1 post with a successful hit.


Name: Knife of Scorn
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: One Thousand Armaments; Elucidator is equipped
Class: Offensive
Element: Non-Elemental
Cooldown: 1 Post
Duration: 1 Post
Effect: One day, Kuro found Calypso watching one of the latest anime, which was about a girl who killed her lover for standing her up on their first monthsary. In that moment, Calypso was using a knife – which looked eerily the same as the one the girl lead was using – in order to make herself a sandwich. But the image in his mind of Calypso with a bloody knife was enough for Kuro to walk far away very quickly. This spell is inspired by that event, in which Kuro conjures a bloody knife that deals D-rank cutting damage. With his enhanced strength, Kuro could throw the knife with enough force to deal D-rank damage. He could sometimes hear faint, manic laughter coming from it in the presence of men, though he doesn't know why.



Last edited by Kurogane Shizuki on Sat Jan 18, 2014 7:43 pm; edited 6 times in total

2Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Re: Kuro's Starter Armaments Mon Jan 06, 2014 5:11 am

Alyssa Strauss

Alyssa Strauss
Hello Kurogane,

I'm Alyssa and I'll be reviewing this magic application.

For your spell named: Sakabatou [Reverse-Edged Sword], could you please describe a system which can be used to measure the probability of an opponent not blocking your attack. As with many other applications with spells involving probability, a system either needs to be established by the owner that allows both the user and the opponent to measure probability, or edit the effect in such a way that it does not include probability.

Secondly, for your spell named: Shinobu’s Frying Pan, I feel that the gathering of blue energy into the pan for projection as a ranged attack should be another spell altogether. The spells's main purpose is to summon the ban from Elucidator and since this effect is not a passive ability such as Sakabatou's attack speed increase, it should not be included into this as one spell.

Thirdly for your Intendo Hammer, I believe that the same problem applies as it did in Shinobu's Frying Pan. The effect of doubling the damage from a skyward smash is not the same as transforming the Elucidator into the Intendo Hammer itself. This should be a different spell. In addition, if you multiply D-Rank damage by two, it would be considered as C-Rank. This would mean that your D-Rank weapon is causing C-Rank damage. This is not allowed.

Lastly, your Knife of Scorn also has the same problem as the one listed in Intendo Hammer and Shinobu's Frying Pan. The spell is used for summoning the knife. Shooting it out is another effect all together and should not be included in the same spell but rather in another one. You do realise that you are entitled to one C-Rank spell? In addition, this magic seems a lot of ReQuip magic. Please make sure you define the difference.

As always, if you have any questions or concerns, please do not hesitate to contact me. Best of luck on your edits!

Yours,

Alyssa

3Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Re: Kuro's Starter Armaments Tue Jan 07, 2014 12:23 pm

Kurogane Shizuki

Kurogane Shizuki
Bump!

4Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Re: Kuro's Starter Armaments Fri Jan 10, 2014 7:25 am

Sayuri

Sayuri
Sakabatou [Reverse-Edged Sword]: This is approved.

Shinobu’s Frying Pan: This is approved.

Bunny Bunny Pogo Stick: This is approved.

Intendo Hammer: The rank will be C if the spell is able to cause C-class damage. The mana costs for a C-class spell is 20. Please use meters instead of inches/feet.

Knife of Scorn: "when used on members of the male sex, Kuro swore the knife went faster and cut deeper." The damage will be the same with any person, despite the gender.

5Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Re: Kuro's Starter Armaments Sat Jan 18, 2014 8:51 pm

Kurogane Shizuki

Kurogane Shizuki
Bump!

6Kuro's Starter Armaments Empty Re: Kuro's Starter Armaments Tue Jan 21, 2014 9:07 pm

Tali Zorah

Tali Zorah
Approved and added to profile

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