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1A Litter of spells~ Empty A Litter of spells~ Thu Jan 02, 2014 2:01 pm

Aoi Mitsurugi

Aoi Mitsurugi
Name: Frozen Carver
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Requip
Class: Offensive
Element: Ice
Cooldown: 4 posts unless destroyed
Duration: Until dismissed or destroyed
Effect: The caster summons this weapon from the pocket dimension onto their back and can travel and walk with in on while it is "summoned" out. Once drown, this weapon cannot be resheashed, as the contained size cannot be refitted into it. This weapon deals D rank damage of small cuts and bruising if it hits someone. It can be destroyed by a weapon C rank or above, 2 D rank spells, or 1 C rank spell or above. The spell imbues Ice based damage so it can deal higher based damage to plant, water, and earth magics, but is weaker to fire, earth, and sand magics. So, with weaknesses, the weapon is more likely to break when being in contact against fire, earth, and sand magics, but with the strengths can more easily destroy plant, water, and earth magics.

Frostbite (10 mp) - If the caster swings their weapon and makes contact with the enemy, a small thin sheet of ice will cover the area (an arm, torso, etc.) and only one. The ice spreads at a speed of 5 in/s, slowing that part of their body by 25%. The ice can be destroyed by a single d rank weapon or spell, and can last up to 2 posts before it shatters. Cooldown is 3 posts, and does not begin the cooldown until the ice is shattered.

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Name: Shadow Slicer
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Requip
Class: Offensive
Element: Darkness
Cooldown: 3 post cooldown unless destroyed
Duration: Until dismissed or destroyed
Effect: he caster summons this weapon from the pocket dimension onto their back and can travel and walk with in on while it is "summoned" out. This weapon deals D rank damage of small cuts and bruising if it hits someone. It can be destroyed by a weapon C rank or above, 2 D rank spells, or 1 C rank spell or above. The spell imbues darkness based damage so it can deal higher based damage to light based magics, but is equally as weak to light and holy magics as well. So, with weaknesses, the weapon is more likely to break when being in contact against light magics, but with the strengths can more easily destroy those types of magics as well.

Dark barrier (10 mp) - The caster slams the bottom of their weapon into the ground, making a shield of darkness around them 5 meters wide and 5 meters tall at 10 m/s. The shield can block 1 D rank spell or 1 C rank spell of light element. Cooldown is 4 posts.

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Name: Cinder
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Requip
Class: Offensive
Element: Fire
Cooldown: 3 post unless destroyed
Duration: Until dismissed or destroyed
Effect: he caster summons this weapon from the pocket dimension onto their back and can travel and walk with in on while it is "summoned" out. This weapon deals D rank damage of small cuts and bruising if it hits someone. It can be destroyed by a weapon C rank or above, 2 D rank spells, or 1 C rank spell or above. The spell imbues fire based damage so it can deal higher based damage to ice and plant based magics, but is weaker to water, earth, and sand based magics. So, with weaknesses, the weapon is more likely to break when being in contact against water, earth, and sand magics, but with the strengths can more easily destroy ice and plant magics as well.

Fire wave (10 mp) - The caster swings their weapon from one end of their body to the other and launches a wave of fire at the enemy at 10 m/s, dealing bruising and stinging pains. The wave is 4 meters long. 3 meters tall, and 1 meter wide. It can be blocked by a D rank shield. Cooldown is 3 posts.

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Name: Air Splicer
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Requip
Class: Offensive
Element: Wind
Cooldown: 4 post unless destroyed
Duration: Until dismissed or destroyed
Effect: The caster summons this weapon from the pocket dimension onto their back and can travel and walk with in on while it is "summoned" out. This weapon deals D rank damage of small cuts and bruising if it hits someone. It can be destroyed by a weapon C rank or above, 2 D rank spells, or 1 C rank spell or above. The spell imbues wind based damage so it can deal higher based damage to earth, sand, and fire magic, but is weak to ice magic. So, with weaknesses, the weapon is more likely to break when being in contact against ice magic, but with the strengths can more easily destroy earth, sand, and fire magics as well.

Wind Blade (10 mp) - The caster swings their weapon from one end of their body to the other and launches a blade of wind at the enemy at 10 m/s, dealing bruising and cuts. The blade is 4 meters long and 1 meter wide. It can be blocked by a D rank shield. Cooldown is 3 posts.

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Last edited by Aoi Mitsurugi on Mon Jan 06, 2014 10:54 am; edited 3 times in total

2A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Sat Jan 04, 2014 1:06 am

Alyssa Strauss

Alyssa Strauss
Hello Aoi~

Your application is going to be reviewed by me before it can be approved by the Administrators.

So far, my opinion for the supplementary spell: Frostbite would be that you need to include a greater drawback. You debuff the opponent for two turns yet the cooldown is only three posts? That would mean that the spell would essentially only have a one post cooldown. Please either lengthen this cooldown or shorten the duration of the effect.You do state that it can be broken by one D-Rank attack or spell, but this would mean that mage would of equal rank would have to spend time on ridding themselves of the ice; essentially making them lose time in their posts. Adding onto that, your weapon Frozen Carver states that it can deal higher weapon damage to Plant, Water, and Earth magics but yet is weaker towards Fire, Earth, and Sand magics. Could you please elaborate more upon that as in what happens when you attack against those elements. Do you lose attack power? Do you gain? Please make that clear.

For Shadow Slicer, you provide a paradoxical situation. You mention that it is strong yet weak at the same time in the presence of light/holy magic. Yet, what does this mean? Please elaborate more on the effects of Shadow Slicer when facing these elements. For your spell Dark Barrier, I'm afraid that you will need to clarify this specific effect: This barrier may block 1 C-Ranked attack. Please make sure to clarify that when it is blocking spells of any other element that is not light/holy, it can only block 1 D-rank spell. This would balance the spell and nobody would have quarrels about it.

Cinder's problems lie within the ones mentioned before. You state that it is powerful against Ice and Plant based attacks/defenses but yet is weak to Water, Earth, and Sand based magics. What does this mean? Elaborate please. That is the only problem with Cinder.

Fix spelling in the description of Air Splicer. It shares the same problem as the ones mentioned above. Could you elaborate upon what you mean by it is strong against (whatever) but weak against (whatever). That is the only problem with Air Splicer.

All in all, your magic will need some major revamping, but I trust you will be able to do it. If you have any questions or concerns, please do not hesitate to contact either Tali Zorah or me. We would be more than happy to help you. Best of luck with your edits.

Yours,

Alyssa Strauss

3A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Sat Jan 04, 2014 10:52 am

Aoi Mitsurugi

Aoi Mitsurugi
Alright madam, spells are all fixed, as per requested! ^-^

EDIT: As per learning that Holy is categorized under light as an element here, I have removed holy from my scythe and from it's spell.

4A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Sun Jan 05, 2014 6:02 am

Alyssa Strauss

Alyssa Strauss
Hello Aoi,

Excellent job. I believe this is ready for approval from the Administrators.


Yours,

Alyssa

5A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Sun Jan 05, 2014 5:42 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
Alright Aoi, I'll be going through the approval process with your spells.

Frostbite: 10 meters a second is 32 feet a second. Lower this to encompass a limb, keeping average body size in mind.

Wind Blade: State how big this slash is.

Bump when edited!

6A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Mon Jan 06, 2014 10:55 am

Aoi Mitsurugi

Aoi Mitsurugi
Done. And as pointed out the blade dimensions are in there

7A Litter of spells~ Empty Re: A Litter of spells~ Mon Jan 06, 2014 10:58 am

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
Alright, looks good.

*Stamp of Approval!*

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