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1Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Sat Mar 22, 2014 8:53 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Name: Eldritch Release: Ragna Blade

Rank:  S

Magic Cost: 50

Requirements: Must be in the possession of the Unspeakable Bar Thing

Class:  Defensive

Element:  Darkness

Cooldown:  10 posts

Duration: Until Dismissed or Destroyed

Effect:  Eli chants an incantation of release and releases the eldritch seals on her holder weapon. Revealing it's true form (It being a physical piece of the Dweller itself). As a mortal mind cannot comprehend the true form of Eli's weapon it instead is interpreted as a massive blade of billowing darkness (2 meters large). This blade does the normal damage that Eli's weapon would. While this blade is in existence, Eli is now a direct conduit of the Dweller's power. Overriding her personality.

Any spell or attack Eli deems hostile and wishes to stop within 50 meters of Eli is warped into another dimension of darkness through a dimensional rift that acts very much like a super strong vaccuum, rendering them harmless. The entirety of the magical power behind a spell will be sucked into this dimension like a vacuum, nullifying the spell entirely, while physical attacks from a wielded weapon will just temporarily be sucked into this dimension until the wielder stops attacking, then it will return to our dimension. If the attacker doesn't maintain a good grip on their weapon, they may lose their weapon in this dimension for the duration of the rest of the combat due to the force of the vacuum sucking their weapon in. (Must have an equal or greater strength than Eli at the time their weapon is sucked in or they will lose their weapon. This counts for non cosmetic gauntlets and greaves as well as holder items.) Once the combat is finished, the lost weapon will be randomly spewed out of another dimensional rift near Eli's opponent.

This spell can absorb up to 2 S rank spells or attacks, 4 A rank spells or attacks, 8 B rank spells or attacks, 16 C rank spells or attacks, and 32 D rank spells or attacks before it cannot absorb any more attacks, rendering the defensive portion of this spell no longer in effect. Light based spells or attacks halve these numbers. This is the same pool for both spells and attacks, so if Eli absorbs 1 S rank spell she can only absorb up to one S rank weapon attack and vise-versa. As Eli is directly channeling the Dweller itself, an Elder Sign does not work against this spell. Or any other spell Eli casts while this spell is active.

The incantation is as such. “Sword of the cold dark void. Free yourself from the heaven's bonds. Become one with my power, one with my body, and let us walk the path of destruction together. Power that can smash even the souls of the gods! Ragna Blade!”

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Last edited by Eliara Mitsurugi on Mon Mar 24, 2014 6:52 pm; edited 9 times in total

2Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:08 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
Okay, I'll be taking a look at this:

There's a lot going on here, meaning the spell does far too much--even for an S Rank. Spells cannot be two classes--it's either defensive, offensive, or supplementary. Please pick one and we'll go from there.

3Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:35 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Bump, dropped the supplementary stuff, the spell was mostly a defensive anyways.

4Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Sun Mar 23, 2014 4:44 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
"...reality itself, changing the landscape 25 meters around Eli into the fleshy hell that she regularly hallucinates."

This is a supplementary effect, or even could be offensive as it targets other things (animals, plants, etc.) If this spell is defensive, remove this. The 'warping' could be used to cause terror, which in turn, is an offensive effect.

The distortion states that it can grip weapons as well as deflect spells. If you're going to also have this spell make you immune to disarms, you're going to have to pick one--either spells or a weapons. The spell is already doing two things at once (making you immune to disarm and stopping spells or a weapon). The same goes with the ability to reapply this defensive spell by half.

Increase the cooldown to 10.

Bump when edited.

5Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 1:39 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Bump, dropped the stuff that I was going to use in other spells anyways. I just wanted to see if I could get them in here, since it's an S rank and all XD

6Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 3:34 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
You didn't cut it down to two things, as I said.

So far you have:

Disarm immunity
Stops physical attacks
Stops magical attacks
Ability to reapply the buff

Out of these four things, pick two.

7Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 4:04 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Bump, it now only stops physical and magical attacks.

8Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 6:03 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
Place a limit on how many physical attacks of appropriate rank this can stop. As it is now, you're impervious to physical damage. It would stop twice as many weapon strikes of rank than it would spells.

9Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 6:53 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Bump, just had to point out what was already there and add a new line.

10Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Mon Mar 24, 2014 8:35 pm

Kazuki Kobayashi

Kazuki Kobayashi
Approved for training. Link back when done.

Also, I changed the CD to 10, since you failed to do so.

11Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Fri Apr 11, 2014 1:53 pm

Eliara Mitsurugi

Eliara Mitsurugi
Training Finished~ Bump~

http://www.natsudragneel.com/t1486p15-training-seraxiel-invites-only#9926

12Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Empty Re: Sword of Darkness (Free S Rank) Sun Apr 13, 2014 9:21 am

Inzei Mishima

Inzei Mishima
The spell has been added to your profile.

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