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1Inaho's Starter Set Empty Inaho's Starter Set Sun Dec 14, 2014 7:34 pm

Inaho

Inaho
Name: Takeover: Sentinel Maestro
Rank: C
Magic Cost: 20
Requirements: Takeover: Machina Soul
Class: Defensive
Element: Metal
Cooldown: 5
Duration: 2
Effect: Maestro, Inaho's inner machine, awakens as a titanium shield covering his right arm. With this shield, Inaho can take on 2 C-Ranked hits or 1 B-Ranked

Name: Takeover: Infernal Link Maestro
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Takeover: Machina Soul
Class: Offensive
Element: Metal/Fire
Cooldown: 3
Duration: Instant
Effect: Maestro awakens from Inaho's soul as a silver armor over Inaho's left arm, and appears with a northern, western, eastern, and southern target immediately etched in the ground within a 5-meter radius. Should Maestro encounter any object along the way, that additional target will be engulfed in flames, and suffer both D-Ranked damage. This is unless they manage to surpass the speed or have an advantage over fire, of course.

Name: Takeover: Ten Blade Maestro
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Takeover: Machina Soul
Class: Offensive
Element: Metal
Cooldown: 3
Duration: Instant
Effect: Maestro awakens from Inaho's soul as a crest over Inaho's palm. This crest activates and makes ten blades immediately present in a ten-axis compass surrounding Maestro's initial target (5-meter radius of the user). Each direction includes one floating blade. All blades must connect with the target to successfully inflict D-Ranked damage. If not, whichever blades do not connect with Maestro's target will reappear as an addition to the initial ten blades the next time Maestro/Inaho uses this spell. These blades leave small wounds, despite their extremely low damage per blade, meaning if all blades connect, massive bodily damage can be inflicted upon the enemy, regardless of rank. Each blade takes 2 D-Ranked hits to destroy. Each blade travels at 30MPH

Name: Takeover: Resilient Maestro
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Takeover: Machina Soul
Class: Supplementary
Element: Metal
Cooldown: 4 turns
Duration: Instant
Effect: Maestro awakens as a silver armor over Inaho's chest. If he is hit with a spell or melee attack, by taking an additional 50% damage, Maestro's possessor can reappear 5-meters behind the person responsible for the hit, instantaneously. If this be the case, Inaho can attempt to hit the enemy immediately.

Name: Takeover: Shadow Maestro
Rank: D
Magic Cost: 10
Requirements: Takeover: Machina Soul
Class: Supplementary
Element: Shadow/Metal
Cooldown: 2
Duration: 2
Effect: This spell requires the use of two prior Machina Soul spells to activate and resolve successfully. Maestro immediately awakens from Inaho's soul as a shadow, enveloping Inaho's body, and can lurk around for two posts. This happens due to the aftermath of using two prior Machina Soul spells, giving Maestro the ability to further develop temporarily of being a shadow, of course- an exclusive, additional property. While lurking, Inaho can hit someone physically from beneath their body, and cause D-Ranked damage. The target cannot be hit more than once per post.



Last edited by Inaho on Tue Dec 23, 2014 12:30 pm; edited 11 times in total

2Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Tue Dec 16, 2014 9:13 am

Elizabeth Silvershield

Elizabeth Silvershield
Hello Inaho! Your spells are pretty well-done, however, there is a small problem; As it appears, most of them, if not all, are Full Take-Over spells, although, in the rules, it is stated that, at D Rank you can have just Minor Take-Over (D Ranked spells) and Moderate Take-Over. Please fix that so that we can get to the actual grading ^^

Bump when edited.

3Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Thu Dec 18, 2014 5:47 pm

Inaho

Inaho
Fixed. The last is an exception because it is not a full takeover, but rather just shadow enveloping Inaho, giving him the properties of a shadow momentarily.

4Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Sat Dec 20, 2014 6:19 am

Elizabeth Silvershield

Elizabeth Silvershield
- State it can take on 2 D or 1 C Ranked hits, regardless if they are spell or melee. Plus, this is a C Ranked spell, right? If that's the case, then please state it in the rank space, as it currently states that it is a D Ranked spell, while its cost is 20MP.

- The cost of D Ranked spells is 10, not 20. 20 is the cost of C Ranked spells. Lower the raidus to 5m, as this is a D Ranked spell, and the maximum raidus is of 5m. Please remove the part in which you state that Maestro can travel towards the target at 200% speed. This is too much for a D Ranked spell, plus, this spell affects your arm, not your legs. The 1st Degree burns are included in the damage. Remove the part in which you state that the burning effect inflicts an additional 50% D-Ranked damage. State that you deal D Ranked damage per hit.

- The cost of D Ranked spells is 10, not 20. Fix that, please. Lower the amount of blades to 10 or 5, please. State that the maximum range at which the blades can appear is of 5m from where the user is standing. State that the blades deal D Ranked damage only if they hit the target all together, or 10/5 times, depending on the blades you can summon. State the speed at which they move, and state that the blades can be destroyed by 2 hits of D Ranked damage each.

- The cost of D Ranked spells is 10, not 20. Please explain what will happen if you reappear 5m behind the person that attacked you.

- The cost of D Ranked spells is 10, not 20. Lower the duration to 2 posts, and the cooldown to 2 too.

Bump once completed.

5Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Mon Dec 22, 2014 4:49 pm

Inaho

Inaho
Bump. Hopefully this can get approved now.

6Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Tue Dec 23, 2014 5:41 am

Elizabeth Silvershield

Elizabeth Silvershield
You can have 4 D ranked spells and 1 C as starters, meaning that you can make one of yur D ranked spells a C Ranked one. Once that is fixed, you'll be good to go.

7Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Tue Dec 23, 2014 12:31 pm

Inaho

Inaho
Done. Thanks for reviewing.

8Inaho's Starter Set Empty Re: Inaho's Starter Set Tue Dec 23, 2014 12:35 pm

Elizabeth Silvershield

Elizabeth Silvershield
Approved for Starter Spells.

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